For my final portfolio for ENG 131 I have chosen to revise my feature narrative and my wix multi-modal project. I have chosen these two projects, because I enjoyed working on them the most and think I have ways I can change and improve my narrative and website. For Writing Project 2 (Feature Narrative) I have revised my paper to incoorprate more time elements, additional comments on the quotes I have pulled from outside sources, and extended my conclusion paragraph. For Writing Project 3 (WIX Multi-Modal Project) I have modified my home page to have a uniformed font and layout and included a refection section. Then on other pages, I have ensured my images are cropped and visually attractive with a variety of layouts. The last thing I did to update my WIX page was to delete the "login" button and the "let's chat" tab at the bottom because I will not be needing these functions for my website. For this reflection I plan on discussion the following: immersion experience, strategies learned, set pieces, peer review work, and the COVID-19 impact. The rhetorical context of my multi modal discourse includes multiple purposes: to share my writing portfolio in my ENG 131 class and to share my work with the medical audience outside the classroom. 

 

I selected this as my course immersion experience because I have never job shadowed in an ER and I thought it would be a great idea to gain exposure in my future profession.

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During my immersion experience at the Riley Children’s Hospital Emergency Room, I gained exposure to my future profession, learned about how an ED operates medication and patients, and got to see patient interaction. I learned how nurses mourn over the death of a child, how medication is delivered to patients and what happens if there is a problem. I selected this as my course immersion experience because I have never job shadowed in an ER and I thought it would be a great idea to gain exposure in my future profession. With both writing projects I felt like I have discovered, explored, and analyzed ideas in order to write with a strong sense of ownership for the pieces I have put together.  To prepare, I did research by watching the Code Black documentary and many other medical series on Netflix. I also asked my friend to prepare for things like what to wear, what to bring, and how to set up the job shadowing experience. Some research I conducted was watching Code Black, looking at multiple samples for each project,  searched other film reviews, and other scholarly sources to write my set pieces. This research helped me get my foot in the door at a possible job place for the future and to learn about all the different professions in an ER. 

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With both writing projects I felt like I have discovered, explored, and analyzed ideas in order to write with a strong sense of ownership for the pieces I have put together. 

 

After my experience job shadowing at Riley’s ER, I took notes to look back to for my paper. I couldn’t have my phone out during the experience, so I only took notes after my experience with everything I could remember. By doing this I knew immediately what my main point would be; however, I decided to do more research on nurses' emotions and then the steps to get medicine for a patient because I was very interested in these aspects.

 

As I strategically revised my immersion experience narrative, I opened with the trouble like En media res. By using a W131 strategy from "The Question of Where We Begin" I started with trouble in the introduction paragraph by using dialog from the physician stating the child is pronounced dead at 2:59. The setting was stated in the first or second paragraph as well, so the audience knew exactly where I was. I made sure to share details about the process of a death in an ER and all the work that happens after one occurs. For my set pieces I chose two that stuck out for me, one about the medicine delivery process and one about the emotions of a nurse dealing with a patient's death. These two seemed like the most fitting for my paper with the main aspect being the death of a child. For the film review, I did a "Synchronicity"  style introduction by putting as much information about artifacts in the film, setting, director,  genre, movie title, detail  and commentary. Even though I used different styles of introductions for both writing projects I felt like I had a clear focus and a strong thesis  with providing sufficient support.

 

Reading Percy’s essay “My Terrifying Night” helped as I wrote my feature narrative with an introduction paragraph, introducing characters, and adding timing into my writing. Percy always starts with trouble, so I started with the death of the child to set the tone with the rest of my paragraph. One big thing I revised in my feature narrative is adding more time elements like "2 hours after the child passed away..." and how I introduced characters like describing the child who passed as a "poor African American 7-month old boy". In my wix page, I also designed it to pull out the quotes with the trouble in the beginning of my page to make it stand out. I added little time elements throughout both my film review and feature narrative by stating at the beginning of the film this happens. 

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ICE-ICE method and Anomalisa method = good base to ground my focus and guide me to this classes outlook on multiple source paragraphs

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I felt pretty comfortable with set pieces coming into the semester, because I have took multiple college level English courses that did not transfer. But, I felt like the ICE-ICE method and Anomalisa method had a very good base to ground my focus and guide me to this classes outlook on multiple source paragraphs. I used sources effectively by synthesizing ideas, integrating them smoothly, and documenting them correctly by citing them in MLA format and including them into a works cited page at the end of each project. For my set piece in my film review, I started out with this:  "In the old LA County Hospital, there was a different connection between patients, doctors, and everyone involved. Code Black director, Ryan McGurry states, "If you are an outsider, I see total chaos. But I see unity in that chaos, their is a team here coming together to save someones life" (McGurry, 1). As McGurry says the chaos had unity within the C Booth in the Old LA County Hospital and their is a different mindset within it, drawing in many residents, patients, and viewers to this hospital. As the documentary continues and the building of the new LA County Hospital, things change. This occurs because they now have to follow codes, HIPPA, and fill out about 60 pages for each patient. This ultimately causes the residents to believe "When we start all of this, it seemed so simple. We were going to help people, but the doctor, the system is sometimes bigger than you.It becomes this bucket of paperwork of saving someone's life" (Code Black)." With revisions and looking back at the Anomalisa, I added a better conclusion instead of ending the paragraph with a quote from the movie by adding this to what I have above:  " Unfortunately, because of all these new updates and new codes the residents have to follow, they do not feel the same connection that they felt in the C Booth. This forces the residents to look for ways to fix/change the system to improve the flaws." With participating productively in discussions throughout the semester, I felt like my set pieces have gotten stronger than ever and I will continue to learn and reflect on my writing practices to improve them.

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Peer reviews throughout the semester also shape, revise and edit your writing to meet the concerns of purpose and audience . When we passed our computers or papers around to peers, I felt like I gained information on sections I need to improve on, rearrange my paragraphs, and fix grammar error. I think most of the peer reviews we did were focused on the set pieces, introductions, and conclusions; which I believe were very helpful with creating a better final draft. I felt like throughout the semester, the peer reviews got a little worse in my opinion, because everything was moved online and we can't communicate with the person we are revising. Covid-19 had many impacts on this semester and not very many were positive for me. First, it made me move back home away from my friends and moving classes online was pretty drastic for me. I feel like my classes now require more work than if we would be taking the class in person and I don't feel like I am able to learn as much without hands on and person interaction. Even though we change the set up in this class and are only meeting one day a week, it feels so much harder because I do not feel like I have as much guidance as I would have if we were having a face to face interaction. However, over the past week it has gotten a little better and I am starting to feel a little more comfortable with everything online. I just wish I could be back in at IUPUI with in person classes and all my friends.

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